This is for Jane Dougherty’s Poetry Challenge 21, Pantoum
The robin sang with the light
“Get up, come play,” said he
Brush away the dreamworld night
Up here, he said, you will be free
“Get up, come play,” said he
But the moss-dressed limbs were high
Up here, he said you will be free
No, I cannot fly.
But the moss-dressed limbs were high
Still, they called my name
No, I cannot fly,
Yet wanting to all the same.
Still they called my name,
Like the sirens of the sea,
Yet wanting to all the same
Sail away high on the ancient tree.
Like the sirens of the sea,
The leaf-breeze trilled in delight
Sail away high on the ancient tree
The robin sang with the light.
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Great Poem and pic too.
Thank you so much!
welcome
Lovely poem. The nice thing about robins is that they will rise you from your bed even when you don’t want to get up!
Thank you. I do like to listen to them in the early morning. 🙂
Me too. Sometimes. 🙂
Lovely, Merril! Finished or not. All poems can be polished and polished. That first line is glorious 🙂
Thank you, Jane. 🙂
Lovely poem, Merril. You captured that angst between wanting and doing. And a timely focus too. I hear we’ve just “seen” our first one up home (Vermont).
Thank you, Janet. I think we have some that winter here, but the singing has definitely increased.
Morning sounds so beautiful. I could almost hear it.
Thank you so much, Susan!
i like your use of several reoccuring lines/themes. Well done, Merril. … and I couldn’t resist. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XKCaVCCqVBw
Thank you, Frank.
It’s the pantoum form–you use lines two and four as lines one and three in the next stanza.
Thanks for the early morning song. I’ll have to remember Doris and the Red, Red Robin for Birds: The Musical. 🙂
Appropriate for the day…the birds were going crazy here. They can’t wait for spring either!
I like the way you’ve varied the rhythm too. (K)
Thanks, K. It’s been unseasonably warm–all the creatures and plants are confused. 🙂
Beautifully done Merril.
xxx Gigantic Hugs xxx
Thanks so much, David! Hugs back to you!
Lovely, and so spring-like in nature. (Am I punning again? I don’t mean to.) 🙂
Thank you, Robin! 🙂
Always a challenging form. Well managed.
Thanks so much!
I loved this poem, Merril. All of it, and the picture, too. But the two lines– “The leaf-breeze trilled in delight…The robin sang with the light.”–gave me such a vivid, charmed image. Well done.
Thank you very much, Marylin! I’m happy you liked it!
A beautiful pantoum. It has a very lyrical ad dream-like quality.
Thank you. 🙂
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