Under Three Moons: A Trilune

 

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Photo by MKcray (Own work) [GFDL (http://www.gnu.org/copyleft/fdl.html) or CC BY 3.0 (http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by/3.0)%5D, via Wikimedia Commons

 

On this brave new world, I watch the sky,

scintillating stars, and glowing moons

they shine, these three, brightly, so clearly.

 

At day’s end, the suns set in the north

and rise in the south, over red seas.

It’s not yet home, but almost, nearly.

 

On this brave new world, there is no war,

and I would feel content, yet regret

I left her, who I loved so dearly.

 

This poem is in response to Jane Dougherty’s poetry challenge.  The poem is a new poetry form, the trilune, which Jane invented. She explains it this way:

“A trilune is a poem of three stanzas of three lines of 3×3 syllables each (that’s 9 in case you were wondering), circling a central theme.  The rhyme is on the third line of each stanza so you get a pattern of abc dec fgc.”

The prompt was the photo above.

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34 thoughts on “Under Three Moons: A Trilune

  1. Is there a significance regarding the construction of the trilune (numerically speaking)? Three and nine (being three threes) are ‘sacred’ numbers in Celtic mythology and other traditions. Interesting form and lovely poem. Enjoyed reading.

      • I hope he will come back to her. Funny, I got an image of that line from “Cold Mountain,” which was such a great movie about strong women waiting for their men to come home, with Nicole Kidman and Renee Zwelleger. Your poem was very thought provoking. Why did he leave her? . . .

      • The book is wonderful, too. You know it’s the based on the legend of Odysseus, but including the women’s view. I guess men going off to war or for adventure goes back to ancient times. I think this man was either forced to leave earth because of problems there, or else he was simply an adventurer who decided to do so. I’m not sure which one. 🙂

  2. It amazes me to see all the new poetic forms emerging here. The forms I remember in my lit classes were very pedestrian by contrast: blank verse, sonnets, villanelles – that’s about it. A trilune – how romantic!

  3. Pingback: Poetry challenge Trilune: the entries – Jane Dougherty Writes

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