This pantoum is inspired by a post by Frank of A Frank Angle. I borrowed my first line from him. Thanks, Frank!
At the horizon, known and unknown meet,
this liminal space between sky and sea
when the sun dips down, and night not complete
where dreams are unfettered and left to dance free–
this liminal space between sky and sea,
in this place, future and past together dwell,
while explorers and dreamers look here with uncertainty,
they still seek this place–and fall under its spell.
In this place, future and past together dwell,
some think deep thoughts here, some none at all,
they still seek this place—and fall under its spell
as they watch ships vanish, beyond shouts and call.
Can we know what fate foretells here–
when the sun dips down, and night not complete?
Do we fear, question, or wait for what appears?
Certain only, at the horizon, known and unknown meet.
John Frederick Kensett, “Sunset on the Sea,” [CC0], via Wikimedia Commons
I’m off prompt for NaPoWriMo. I’m also linking this to dVerse Open Link Night.
Oh, you do this form so gently and elegantly. Simply beautiful, Merril!
Thank you, Jilly–that is such a lovely compliment! ❤
The form reads beautifully with the rhyming verses~ For me it is the uncertainty that gains the upper hand ~ Thanks for joining in ~
Thanks so much, Grace.
Wow … so well done & a wonderful pairing with my walk. The fact that I played a role in your inspiration brings get joy to me. Merril, thank you for the wonderful gift and for using my line to open your poem.
I’m glad you liked the poem, Frank. Thank you for your kind words about it–as well as the inspiration! 🙂
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This is quite beautiful Merril. I have been following Frank and the lead in is beautiful and the rest perfect.
Thank you very much, Holly!
This was utterly beautiful, Merril. What a great collaboration (whether Frank knew it or not 😉 ) I told him it is wonderful how we bloggers can sometimes “feed” off each other in such a positive way.
Thank you, Dale, and I agree it is wonderful to be inspired in this way.
Elegant in form and content, Merril. And a tough form to do well!
Thank you very much, Sarah!
Yes, very well done. I liked the exploration of that liminal space through this form.
Thank you so much!
There’s a lovely lilt to this poem, conducted by the rhymes, and I love the dreamlike quality of the lines:
‘this liminal space between sky and sea
when the sun dips down, and night not complete
where dreams are unfettered and left to dance free’.
The repetition also adds to the musicality.
Thank you very much, Kim. I appreciate your close reading!
You have danced with Frank
Thank you, Derrick. (Though I could not keep up with Frank in a ballroom. ) 🙂
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Wonderful write! Loved it!
Thank you so much!
Love this especially “Can we know what fate foretells here– when the sun dips down, and night not complete?”💜
Thank you very much!
This one pushes all my buttons…and in such a lyrical fashion! I love the idea of liminal spaces. (K)
Thank you so much, Kerfe. I do, too, and when I read Frank’s post, I knew I wanted to write a poem from some of what he said.
The form works well with this theme, Merril.
I especially like this line:
“when the sun dips down, and night not complete”
Thank you so much, Ken.
I love this line especially:
“while explorers and dreamers look here with uncertainty,”
Thank you very much, Jennifer!
This flowed and ebbed so well, Merril! The lines were so fluid, yet many stand on their own with true meaning.
I wonder when Luanne stops by if the “liminal space” line will be her favorite?
Thank you, Robin! I really like thinking about all these in-between spaces and places.
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Found you from A Frank Angle’s blog!
Fabulous poem!
Thank you for seeking me out and leaving a comment, Resa!
Having just returned from Bermuda, where the sea is a myriad shades of blue ad green and meets the sky at the horizon, another shade of blue melding into shades of white, ivory and grey clouds….this post really struck home. Wonderful write.
Thank you very much, Lillian!