Once There Was a Time

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Vincent Van Gogh, “The Sower,” Wikipedia Commons

 

Once there was a time to sow

to scatter seeds upon the ground

to water well and watch them grow

a time when hope was found

 

to scatter seeds upon the ground

to grow stalks of hate that bled

a time when hope was found

and lost among the dead

 

to grow stalks of hate that bled

that banished love and kindness

and lost among the dead

the acts of willful blindness

 

that banished love and kindness?

That can’t be how the story goes.

The acts of willful blindness?

Now’s the time to speak, oppose.

 

That can’t be how the story goes.

Plants seeds, a peaceful dream.

Now’s the time. To speak, oppose

is fine. See how wishes gleam?

 

Plant seeds, a peaceful dream,

to water well and watch them grow

is fine. See how wishes gleam–

once there was a time to sow?

 

We’re writing pantoums this month at dVerse, so here’s another one from me. There’s still time to join us.

Lillian has asked us to use some part of the verse from Ecclesiastes, which is also used in the song, “Turn, Turn, Turn” as a prompt.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

48 thoughts on “Once There Was a Time

  1. Damien’s landscape photos the other day have me thinking of Van Gogh. Another great marriage of words and image.
    It really is time, isn’t it? We need to start planting. (K)

  2. Very rhythmic, Merril! This fits in well with the book I just finished. It was a Louise Penny mystery, but set in a monastery, so there was a spiritual, nurturing element.

  3. I love the turn to the positive acts of planting seeds and watering well. This is the way the story should be. The last stanza of this pantoum is my favorite:

    Plant seeds, a peaceful dream,
    to water well and watch them grow
    is fine. See how wishes gleam–
    once there was a time to sow?

  4. I’ll just “ditto” what everyone has said here (yeah, call me Lazy). I do like how you use punctuation, saying the same words but with a different effect. And thank you for the hopeful message at the end!

    • Hahaha. I’ve done the same thing when others have already said what I wanted to say in comments, but thank you! I appreciate your kind words. I’m glad the change in punctuation worked. 🙂

  5. an excellent thought poem Merril, are we walking the talk? are we doing what we preach? plant seeds, a peaceful dream was my favourite part. your punctuation was lovely, i liked the pauses and the final question, that packed a punch!

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