“The mountains are so dominant
that some days the people refuse
to look at them as children
turn away from the fathers who beat them”~ Jim Harrison from Songs of Unreason
Ancient mountains within a blink
stare granite-faced when disaster looms (unseen)
rising through tenebrous skies before the before
in stillness stand when time slows and stops
until the rumbling rocks fall, and then, you move to avoid the sudden slap
a tumbling torrent, of striking blows–too late to turn away–
forever changing what was you’re buried in the detritus of dreams
For Jilly’s Day 12 of 28 Days of Unreason, poetry inspired by the poetry of Jim Harrison. This is another cleave/contrapuntal poem or cleaveapuntal or contracleave. . .
Whatever—it’s a bargain, three poems in one. 😉
Wow – you do this form well! Love each version, but when I read fluidly from left to right, the motion and the stop-motion and the slow-motion, are …are…. there’s no word here. Over-the-top. !!!
Awww–thanks, Jilly!
That makes me feel good–feeling a bit down after receiving another rejection today.
Crud! Sorry. You need chocolate 🙂
Thanks. Good idea! 🙂
It is a bargain—cheap at the price 🙂 Keep submitting. I’m still getting rejections creeping in for the ms that got me an agent last month, places I’d written off as non-responders.
Thanks so much, Jane. 🙂
🙂
Not only 3-in-one but additions to my lexicon – ‘tenebrous’ had to look it up. Like how the mountain is unmoving/stony faced and yet moves as avalanche
Thanks so much, Laura. I”m glad you liked it.
I was thinking at first about how mountains often seem to be unchanging, but then of course there are landslides and volcanic eruptions and such.
Great three-fer! You do this really well. I especially like “before the before”, that was great.
Thanks so much! 🙂
Well done, Merril. Much like dreams, even permanence can be tenuous.
Thank you, Ken.
Ouch! to the quote.
Wow to your cleave/contrpuntal poem!
Thank you, Marian! 🙂
Amazing construction; any one of the three works equally well – and the message is so real
Thank you very much, Derrick.
So well done, Merril. 🙂
Thank you, Robin! 🙂