Enchanting dawn slips
silently past the night,
and with her rosy lips
scatters her light
as she kisses the world awake.
Then—I ache
remembering my dreams
of blue ponies by incandescent streams.
I’ve seen them as I danced among the stars,
but in the light of day,
their world seems much too far away–
and yet–
I know, if never truly seen, still the ponies are there. . .
prancing, shining with blueish sheen, somewhere.
This is for dVerse, where Jilly asked us to write about “unseen.” Last week, Jane Dougherty reminded me about the blue horses. She knows they’re real, too.
Enchanting and uplifting, just what this lunch break needed. Thanks Merril
You’re welcome, dear Damien. Enjoy your lunch!
A beautiful evocation of the shock of waking out of pleasant dreams
Thank you, Derrick.
They are always dancing there somewhere…(K)
Exactly, Kerfe!
love how you kept the dreaminess throughout even in wakefulness where the “blue ponies by incandescent streams” do not vanish
Thank you very much, Laura!
This feels so real… and I’m sure that they are there if want them to be there.
Thank you, Björn. That’s a lovely comment.
YES, the blue ponies are there – we just can’t see them until we’re in dreamland. Same with my flying bathtubs. Lovely, lovely poem.
Thank you so much. 🙂
Ah, the beauty and mystery of dreams! Love how you structured this.
Thanks so much, Jilly!
Of course they’re there! This is very Homeric!
Thank you!
I wouldn’t have thought Homeric, but thank you!
It’s that rosy-fingered dawn 🙂
Ohhh! I must be channeling the Oracle! 🙂
Now isn’t that a surprise?
Hahaha.
🙂
So clever this. Having painted a beautiful (homeric definitely) scene, the turn at line 6 – ‘then I ache’ why? and then you show us the far better unseen world…of blue ponies.
Thank you, Peter, for this close reading!
I’ve always loved Marc’s “Blue Horses,” and now I have an entrancing poem to go with it! Fantastic imagery, too, Merril… blueish sheen…. lovely!
Thank you very much, Rose. ❤
😍
That feeling of wrench away from magical dreams, very familiar. What a beautiful poem.
Thank you so much!
Wow.. please… don’t wake me, don’t even shake me, days spent with feet that fidget, eyes that weep, until I can again join that galloping herd smoothly into a deep blue sleep.
Simply deamkrastik!
Thank you! Your comment made me laugh and smile, joyful dreams aired–and shared– across many miles. 🙂
I like the dawn kissing the world awake and the ache of the missed dreams.
Thank you very much, Frank!
Loving the imagery here…..and those beautiful blue ponies! Just a delightful post to the prompt!
Thanks so much, Lillian!
Beautiful, Merril.
My mind went here…
truths that elude
our eyes live in dreams
waiting for the mind
to recognize them
on waking
Thank you, Ken.
True and lovely thoughts!
🙂
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